ext_42292 ([identity profile] myrebelcat.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] discoveredinalj 2006-12-23 09:49 pm (UTC)

Very good games indeed! Just a lovely story. A good mix of case and character stuff.

I really liked the subtlety of the scene in the caravan where Ray is leaning against the wall, licking his lips and completely oblivious about all the signals he's sending to Bodie. There was a nice tension there between them, and a gradual revelation of what it was all about.

I don't think you really resolved things in the end with regards to their relationship, but considering this seems to be early in their partnership, I think that's just right.

And your writing was wonderfully evocative, as well. Thank you!

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