msmoat.livejournal.com ([identity profile] msmoat.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] discoveredinalj 2006-12-30 02:18 am (UTC)

What =were= you expecting?
Oh, you know, angst and loneliness. *g* Which you put in there--but in a more understated way than I was expecting. Then you went on into the neighbor part--which I love, but that was unexpected. I love the "soldiering on" concept--naturally--and you did that very well. I also wasn't expecting the really huge angst-fest later on, with the Ghost of Christmas Future. So, in looking back, this was perfect, really. A necessary...stillness, if you will, before the plunge into horror.

And then the glorious reprieve. *g* I really liked, too, how you transitioned into Christmas Future--it was close enough to "real" for a niggle of doubt...maybe this *was* real, and you were breaking the Dickens pattern...? *g* Again, well done.

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