Very nice. Lovely bounce and rhythm to Bodie's inner voice here. Island-Bodie is the perfect way to describe him - and then of course, thanks to Doyle, it all falls apart. I loved the way you wrote this part, where Doyle presumably kisses him *g*:
Pah, shut up Bodie. Now I'm sounding like a bad Mills 'n' Boon book. You know the ones – boy meets girl, boy falls out with girl, girl pines, boy makes up with girl when he realises that she is the love of his life. Except this time its boy meets boy, boy doesn’t realise he has fallen in love with boy, boy mphmmmmmmmm…