It's curious you should say that, because one of the things that struck me about this story is that it made me feel some measure of sympathy for him even though his error was (he'd be the first to say!) unpardonable. I confess I'd like to see how he copes with the news - and he must cope, even more so now that he's made that error in the first place!

I liked this: "... Bodie's entire body lit up. Each vein, every capillary near the surface of his skin took fire and flashed it right back to his heart. There was nothing else but this touch, this taste, this scent, and the sight and sound of Ray finally in his arms." It seemed right for the extreme tension of the situation, having secured the building, coming out with their guard down only to come under impossibly unexpected fire. Thank you so much for this story!