Drabble - please don't shoot me!

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Ok, this is my first ever Pros drabble, so please don't shoot me if I don't have them down to the spot yet. It's something that came to my mind in a flash so I wrote it down - 100 words exactly. I do have a problem with those darn commas now and then *cough* Hope it got them right this time. Ok, here goes...

Safe Haven

He woke with a start, momentarily confused about his whereabouts, his mind still stuck in a nightmare full of fire and blood. Reaching out blindly, he found Bodie’s familiar body stretched out beside him. With a sigh of relief he lay back down, one hand still resting on his partner’s broad shoulders. He closed his eyes, waiting for his frantic heartbeat to slow down. He was safe. They both were. Moving closer he wrapped an arm around Bodie who stirred slightly. Smiling faintly Doyle drifted off to sleep again. And this time it held no horrors but only peaceful rest.

I'm not much of a writer but I hope this little thingie is acceptable... *bites nails* I must be totally crazy doing this...

Comments

[nakeisha.livejournal.com]

Mmmm.

Very nice.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Aw, that's a lovely little snapshot! Nothing to worry about, I liked it very much. :-)

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I think you did a good job with it. Nice image of Doyle waking and finding comfort in his partner.

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Ohh lovely! Heart-warming - well done! (This must be some new definition of the phrase 'not much of a writer' that I was previously unaware of)

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

I love this, love the comfort of the "familiar body stretched out beside him."
Nice one!

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

Drabble party!! Just staggered home from work and a hectic week to find a drabble party has started - wheee!! I loved this little snapshot of comfort and rest, very nicely done indeed.

[faramir-boromir.livejournal.com]

You've got the idea--100 words that paint the scene.

[angel-ci5.livejournal.com]

Ditto all the previous comments, this is absolutely lovely!

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

It's lovely, and the commas are fine too!

[probodie.livejournal.com]

This is lovely, perfect - and I want more! Please ;)

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Aww - your little thingie is most acceptable! Thank you so much for drabbling with us! *g*

[empty-mirrors.livejournal.com]

Awww, that's so sweet. Thank you.

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Are that perfect reassurance in that firm warm body at his side.
This was great, honey. Keep it up!

Thanks for sharing!

[przed.livejournal.com]

You've captured such a very nice moment between them. Bravo!