Having a go

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

Everybody’s alive. McCabe won’t see the outside of a hospital for a week, but everybody’s alive. Bodie’s alive. Grinning all over his face, the stupid bastard. Does he think I don’t know why he bulldozed me out of the way? Does he think I don’t care he took a crease himself? Stupid bloody bloody-minded bastard.

 

Clean-up’s done. Sun’s out. It’s shining all over him and his hair’s every which way and his eyes are bright and he’s looking right at me and his smile’s gonna have Cowley wondering why any minute now …. think I’ll take the stupid bastard home.

Comments

[shooting2kill.livejournal.com]

Oh, this was nice! In just a few words you managed to create electricity in the air not only around them but between them with lines like these:

Sun’s out. It’s shining all over him and his hair’s every which way and his eyes are bright and he’s looking right at me and his smile’s gonna have Cowley wondering why any minute now …. think I’ll take the stupid bastard home.

Lovely! and thanks.

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I think I'm just in love with their being in love with each other, you know? I'm so glad you liked it!

[shooting2kill.livejournal.com]

I know what you mean. I'm still trying to work out what my place is going to be in their relationship or, where I come into it (I can dream, can't I?)