ext_28346 ([identity profile] moth2fic.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] discoveredinalj2007-09-21 04:16 pm
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Drabbles

Two prompts. Two drabbles. I don't count the titles.


Spartacus 100 words

A warrior, certainly, ready to fight injustice, trying to improve the lot of the masses, protecting them from the wolves, and from themselves.

Prepared to defend, to the death if necessary, his beliefs, his honour and his partner. Especially his partner, though he hoped to live for him instead.

A slave, too, to the organisation that would call him from bed, board or recreation, to the Official Secrets Act and to government parsimony and pettiness.

Slave, too, to his partner. They had each surrendered their freedom laughingly, lovingly, but not lightly, and the slave shackles were made of pure gold.





Gliding 100 words

Why in the name of Cowley and all sinners had Doyle chosen this sport as their newest recreation?

“For fun,” he had said.

“A different way to keep fit,” he had said.

“To keep you on your toes,” he had said.

And then, the weekend course in the Peak District with the running up and down hill and the instructor’s shouts. But when Bodie saw his partner gliding across the moorland, lit from behind by the early evening sun, he suddenly knew why.

“You had to make the nickname a glorious reality, Angelfish,” he whispered, taking off to join him.

[identity profile] nakeisha.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 03:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, these are both very nice indeed.

I especially like the final line of the first one.

[identity profile] byslantedlight.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 03:41 pm (UTC)(link)
My word, that was quick! And very nice too! *g* (And titles definitely don't count!)

[identity profile] solosundance.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 03:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, speedy and brilliant! I like that you went for the romantic angle with gliding ... Doyle swooping over the peaks at sunset is a lovely image.

[identity profile] myrebelcat.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 04:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, gorgeous! I like the thought behind the first one, and the imagery of the second. Nicely done! I actually re-read them a couple of times, especially that first.

[identity profile] myrebelcat.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 05:27 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm definitely looking forward to reading more from you!

[identity profile] schnuffi.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 05:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Beautiful, just beautiful. Especially the slave shackles of pure gold *sigh*

[identity profile] schnuffi.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 05:21 pm (UTC)(link)
I only took the screenshots - [livejournal.com profile] probodie made some lovely icons from them.

[identity profile] sc-fossil.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 05:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Very good. Definitely write something for us. I loved the last line of the first one. Quite poetic.

[identity profile] callistosh65.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 06:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. Love the imagery in these - the slave/warrior ideas, the shackles of pure gold and of course, Angelfish aginst a sunlit sky. Beautiful.

[identity profile] probodie.livejournal.com 2007-09-21 10:10 pm (UTC)(link)
*grins* Enjoyed both these, but Gliding made me sigh happily at the image of Ray gliding.

[identity profile] melanieathene.livejournal.com 2007-09-22 12:10 am (UTC)(link)
Two lovely drabbles, but I am especially fond of 'Spartacus' -- the warrior/slave imagery really suits the lads, and the last line is perfect.

[identity profile] crimson-37.livejournal.com 2007-09-22 10:44 am (UTC)(link)
They had each surrendered their freedom laughingly, lovingly, but not lightly, and the slave shackles were made of pure gold.

This sentance is so them. Lovely, just lovely.

So good to see you writing Pros.

[identity profile] crimson-37.livejournal.com 2007-09-24 08:46 pm (UTC)(link)
It's great when that happens, especially when it's in the Pros-verse. ;p

[identity profile] empty-mirrors.livejournal.com 2007-09-22 10:48 am (UTC)(link)
Love the gliding. Beautiful image. Thank you.