One more drabble!

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

I'm rather more proud of this one than the last. :-)

But it's unbeta'd, so proceed with caution.



Prompt: Soap

Armistice


Bodie uses too much soap when washing up. He overfills the sink, soaks the counters and floods the floor. He tackles this domestic task with customary mad abandon, over the top and into the enemy trenches. Broken dishes are casualties of war.

An unexpected lull in the combat catches Doyle’s attention. Bodie has captured a soap bubble and is holding it up to the light.

Doyle steps forward.

The bubble pops and Bodie turns, defensively.

This thing between them is fragile, stretched almost too thin to see. “I thought you’d dropped the soap,” says Doyle.

“I still might,” replies Bodie.

~end~

Comments

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I like the parallels between washing up and their relationship. Brings up questions: Is it new or is it going through a rough patch? At least that's how I see it. *g* Thanks.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

How do you see it? I was thinking new, but I could imagine it as a rough patch, too. I'm glad you liked the parallel - I was just about to wash the dishes when this one occurred to me. Now it's an hour later and the dishes still haven't been done. ;-)

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Yup, I can definitely see Bodie at war with the crockery. Love the comparison between the bubble and their relationship. And I do hope Bodie drops the bloody soap! *WG*

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

I think he'd be hard to live with if you cared at all about preserving complete sets of anything. ;-) But the times he drops the soap would make up for all of that.

I love your icon, BTW! I think it goes nicely with my drabble.

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Had the same thoughts about the icon *G*

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

Very classy, Rebel. Amazing the nuances that can be packed into a hundred words. I also thought 'new' when I read it.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I really like these uncomfortable early moments when they're still unsure of each other and where they stand.

[angel-ci5.livejournal.com]

This is so clever! I love the military comparisons to Bodie doing the washing up!
Wonderful, thank you.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

And I love your military Bodie icon! (Okay, I'm guessing that's really Lewis Collins, but I'll pretend it's Bodie.)

Thank you. :-)

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

The fragility of the soap bubble as a metaphor is stunning! Love it!

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Sometimes a soap bubble is... hopefully something a little more permanent than a soap bubble? ;-) I'm glad you liked it!

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Nicely done, this. Love, and soap bubbles, are fragile things and you captured it perfectly. Thanks.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Yeah, but I compared love to a soap bubble! Next thing you know I'll be on about sunsets and azure skies. And azure eyes. ;-) Actually, I'm just really happy it works. Thanks for the kind feedback!

[magenta-blue.livejournal.com]

This is fab! I love how you captured the soldier in him, and the fragility of their relationship. *applauds* :)

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :-) I'm really glad that the drabble works for you - I had fun imagining Bodie at war with his dishes.

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Awww! And yeay for tough, splashy Bodie stopping to watch the soap bubble... that's why I like him - he's a poet at heart!

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Hi! *waves enthusiastically* Bodie's lovely, isn't he?

This was a terrific idea - all these drabbles! :-) Thanks!

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

Makes me think of new, too. I love Bodie attacking the dishes - that made me laugh - and the promise of "I still might" - sounds like very new, still flirting. Bodie should flirt more. There can never be enough Bodie flirting, as long as he's doing it with Doyle of course!

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Mmm... You're right. I need to write more flirtatious Bodie. Something good and long and ultimately NC-17. From watching him interact with Marrika and the rest, I rather get the impression that he likes the flirting and foreplay. He's not just "throw 'em down and frisk 'em." ;-)

Thanks!

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

You should, you really should! And I'm sure you're right, he enjoys the pursuit - though I think Ray may give as good as he gets, and be no passive pursued. Good and long and ultimately NC-17? Sounds like heaven, full of flirtatious Bodie ...

[empty-mirrors.livejournal.com]

Clever and insightful. Lovely.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :-) I'm glad you liked it.

[nakeisha.livejournal.com]

This works really well.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Thank you! That's great to hear. :-)

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Have they had a tiff? Go on Bodie drop the soap!

I realy liked the comparison between the bubble and their relationship at that moment.

Bodie's answer at the end makes it for me.

Thanks for sharing this with us. :)

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

He will! I'm sure of it! :-D

Thank you, I'm glad you liked my drabble!

[miwahni.livejournal.com]

Not just "new" - rather the catalyst of their relationship (or so it seems to me). The beginnings of something new are implicit in Bodie's reply.
Anyway, I love it.

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :-) I'm always please with myself when I can end with a beginning.