Yet another drabble...

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Prick heavy on his tongue, thick and rigid. Bodie’s prick, at long last. God, how he’s wanted this.

Hard to breathe, though.

Tears collect, spill down his cheeks. Let them fall. He’s been around, knows a thing or two, understands the intersection of pleasure and pain.

His own pleasure isn’t important. It’ll wait. He wants Bodie, of course. Has done for ages. But right now he wants to give this to Bodie, wants to feel Bodie tremble with need, pulse down his throat, groan in completion.

***

Heart pounding, Bodie stands above the theatre, eyes fixed on Ray. Dying with Ray.

Comments

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Now that was unexpected! Great drabble.

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Glad it took you by surprise. ::g:: Thanks for the compliment!

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Oh... wow! You just changed everything with that last line. Major paradigm shift, and yikes! Poor Bodie. Poor Ray.

Stunning drabble. Thanks!

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Heh. We likes mindfuck drabbles, we does. ::g::

Many thanks for the compliment!

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

What a punch in 100 words! I love drabbles like this, ones that reach out and grab you from the first to the last. Brilliant.

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

::blush::

You're too kind. So glad it worked for you.

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Absolutely heart wrenching. Caught me totally off guard, this one. Well done!

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Cool! Glad it snuck up on you.

Thanks for the nice words.

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Fantastic - so powerful. Wow.

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Aw, shucks. ::g::

Thanks!

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

That last line was a surprise. I liked it. Thanks!

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

I'm so pleased it suprised you.

Thanks for your kind words.

[empty-mirrors.livejournal.com]

Oooo interesting. Yes, I can see that happening.

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Cool!

[nakeisha.livejournal.com]

Tremendously powerful final line.

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Glad it worked for you!

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Fabulous last line ... that's what drabbles are for!

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Hee! So thrilled you liked it!

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Oh... now we need the promise whispered in his ear that'll make Doyle come back, right? Right?!

Excellent, this - thank you!

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Of COURSE Doyle makes it. ::rolls eyes:: I don't do death stories.

So pleased you liked it!

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

You knocked me for six with that last line. Still feeling it.

I so want to run another line of stars under your drabble and make it all right again for both of them. But I won't cos it's how it is supposed to be, but it leaves me feeling... well, kinda gutted.

Very poweful. Well done!
Thank you for sharing this with us.

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

I so want to run another line of stars under your drabble and make it all right again for both of them.

But Ray DOES make it -- I don't do death stories. Honestly!

Thank you so much for your kind words. ::cherishes::

[elizabethhelena.livejournal.com]

Wow. Powerful imagery. And a knock out punch of an ending.

[beledibabe.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

Your icon! ::rueful grin:: Ouch, indeed!

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

OMG! Amazing, to turn us round and startle us in just 100 words!