Drabble Tree Challenge

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

I'm using the popular last word of "life"--supplied by both callistosh65 and schnuffi. Callisto, this is for you.  It doesn't really make up for your week, but maybe it'll give you some pleasure.  I wish it was actually banter, though!

If
by PFL

"Life in a word: if."

"Eh?"

"One of the things Bodie says.  Said."

"He's going to make it, Doyle."

"If they can operate.  If he survives.  If he's himself when he wakes."

"He's strong."

"He's a fatalist.  He knew it was a suicide mission you sent him on."

"It was his choice."

"To fucking save me."

"Aye."

"Well, here's a certainty for you: we're out of it after this.  Together."

"Oh yes?  What can you offer him I can't?"

"Life."

"Not...love?"

"You know."

"Does he?"

If they can operate.  If he survives.  If he's himself when he wakes.  "He will."

Comments

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

If you want to rip out my heart, you've done it. Thank heavens Doyle is sure. Thanks.

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Oh dear. Really, no heart ripping intended! Bodie's fine! Or will be. I only deal in happy endings! Mostly. *g*

Thanks.
You're welcome? ::apologetic look::

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

Of course, thanks! It was good.

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

It was good
For killing my friends, yes. *g* But thank you!

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

What do you mean "if"? He will get through! For Doyle. He won't leave him behind, never. Please? I hate it when you do that - heart wrenching, gut knotting bloody drabble. *sniffles*

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Honestly, I didn't think it was al that heart wrenching! It's supposed to be helping Callisto, not adding to her...oh dear. Huh. You know, maybe it's different when you're the one writing it. *g* You know I only ever mostly deal in happy endings!

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Bodie on the brink of death is not heart wrenching? Wake up! We're all trembling with Doyle here and she says she mostly deals in happy endings *rolls eyes*

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Yes, but look what he gets if he wakes up! Mind you, he doesn't know that... Hmm. Maybe there is a flaw here.... *g*

[hambelandjemima.livejournal.com]

Ah, this is beautiful. He has to get through, so that Doyle can shag him through the hospital bed make him all better...

Love it ♥

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

I like the way you think! Yes, indeed. *g*

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

What, like the "shag of life"? Bodie's half dead and she thinks smut *shakes head*

I hope those hospital beds are quite sturdy... *whispers "handcuffs"*

[hambelandjemima.livejournal.com]

Bodie's half dead and she thinks smut

And your point is....?

I'm trying to write my own smut, damnit! Not easy with bloody Zak and Cody on telly in the background!

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Write, baby, write!

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Well, it was used to cure Doyle in a coma in a Jane story...

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

Rest easy, hon. I loved it and found it comforting in the extreme. You are a treasure to do this for me and I love you for it, thank you. I marvel at how you get a whole world of backstory in something so short.

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Oh, yay! No heart being wrenched from your chest, then, right? You know Bodie's going to be fine. I write older lads stories! *g*

Thank you, sweetie. I hope you have a good week!

[snailbones.livejournal.com]

Wonderful! Didn't make me want to cry at all, nope, not a bit.

::hides quivering lip:: *g*

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Ooh, brave lass!

But, hey, I guess I was successful in making you all feel what Doyle is feeling--in 100 words exactly. Ha! *g*

Thank you for commenting!

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

You really manage to shoe horn an enormous amount into those 100 words.

Yes it produces that odd little ache in the middle of my chest -- thanks for that -- but it also promises a lot of lovely things in the future... thanks for that too!

Thank you!

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Definitely lovely things in the future. Promise! *g* That's the fun with drabbles, isn't it? To see how much you can get in and still have it make sense? Or maybe it's just that I can't do, um, unlayered dialog. *g*

Thank you for commenting! (I am hopelessly behind in commenting and so suitably impressed by all of you. *g*)

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

How do you do that? There really is so much backstory here - the dangers Bodie faces without thinking twice, to save Doyle; Doyle loving Bodie and never having dared tell him yet; Cowley knowing all about it ... not to mention the way it sets up what will happen later. And all in a nutshell.

Thinking about the drabble-related discussion on Pros-Lit lately, this is a good example of the difference between a 100-word snippet and an actual drabble, a complete story in 100!

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

How do you do that?
No, see, you're doing all that! You're extrapolating from my suggestions. *g* It's fun, isn't it? And maybe a little frustrating....

I did try for a complete story. But it is all suggestion and hints, playing to a Pros audience. *g*

[jgraeme2007.livejournal.com]

Very nice! Enjoying as always...

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

Well, you did say to have something for you to read when you came back, right? So....