May Day - Part Twelve

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

Bodie pushed ahead, stopping between Doyle and Martell. Doyle moved around him so that they both fronted the arms dealer. He wasn't going to create a scene, no matter what Bodie thought. Whatever Bodie believed, they had to get through this first.

"Hello, Marty," Bodie said, affably. "Don't mind my partner, he's having a rough day."

"Hmm. No doubt. You know, Bodie, this goodwill of yours is becoming a trifle inconvenient." Martell fished around in his coat pocket and pulled out an envelope, which he held out to Bodie with one gloved hand. "The key will open a left luggage locker at St Pancras Station. Replace the contents and mail the key back to me when you're done."

Well, Doyle thought, Martell might be a slimy bastard but at least he was a well organised one. And careful – there'd be no prints on the envelope or its contents. He decided to push him a little.

"You'd know a few… specialists in your line of work, wouldn't you?"

Martell's eyes flicked quickly back to Doyle, wary now.

"I might. It depends what you're after."

"Surveillance. Infrared cameras, remote observation. That kind of thing. Someone who could set up a complete coverage of a building, from entrance to cellars…"

"Or broom cupboards," Bodie muttered.

"…without anyone being the wiser." Thank you, Bodie. What the fuck was he doing, giving out hints like that? Doyle gritted his teeth and waited for Martell's reply.

"Jorgensen's in jail and Morgan's working for the Arabs. I know a couple of others, domestic jobs mostly."

"We already have names." That was a lie – he had one name, and a nasty memory to go with it. But it was worth pushing Martell for more. "What we need is information. Last known place of residence and so on."

Martell considered this for a moment. "You have to realise I have legitimate business dealings with these people. It wouldn't go down well if they knew I gave you anything."

"So what will it cost?" Doyle reached for his wallet.

Marty dismissed him with a wave of his hand and a slight sneer. "Put it away, dear boy. You'll owe me a favour, that's all. And we never had this conversation."

"We'll owe you nothing," Bodie said, "unless you give us something worthwhile."

He nodded, a slight movement of his head towards Doyle, as though seeking confirmation. Right now, that was honest reassurance enough.

Comments

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I really liked this meet. Very well played. Thanks. I do wonder if Martell will ask for something -- specific from Doyle down the road. *g*

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

*chuckle* maybe.... Thanks!

Suspect it needs a Brit-check, though as it was written off the back of video watching with the bloke, so (you out there) please pipe up if you see anything wrong.

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I did think about that the other day. Maybe the illustrious moderator will take care of that when it's posted in one big hunk.

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Ha, well done! I wonder what heavy weaponry Marty provided. And what payment he might ask *EG* But as I said before - he wouldn't survive if he made a move towards Doyle.

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

*LOL*! People seem to like a pervy Marty (and I'm definitely one of them). Wonder why that is? Maybe because he's a little like us - he can look, but he can't touch. Not without risking limbs, anyway.

[shooting2kill.livejournal.com]

Like I said at BSL's re her post, I think you're spot-on with how you've managed to achieve the 'real' voices of our lads with their trademark humour:

Hello, Marty," Bodie said, affably. "Don't mind my partner, he's having a rough day."

I love that deadpan humour which is *so* Bodie!

....and this kind of writing which effectively creates an image of the whole scene for me:

Marty dismissed him with a wave of his hand and a slight sneer......

He nodded, a slight movement of his head towards Doyle

Looking forward to more.

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I appreciate specific feedback like yours, it gives me a better idea of what works and what doesn't.

[hambelandjemima.livejournal.com]

Another excellent part. Spot-on with all the voices, as far as I can see, and as a Brit, I can't see anything that stands out as glaringly inaccurate :)

The plot is moving on!

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

Cool! I found one myself after I posted (closet for cupboard) & I always worry that I've missed others. Glad you liked the scene.

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

A superbly realised meeting with Martell. You got the simmering, edgy tone just right and moved it along at a cracking pace.

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I was hoping to keep the tension going between them while moving things along - not quite offering a path back, but at least showing them being able to work together, keep their eyes on the case. Glad it worked for you.

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

I really like the way you have the lads drop into their standard double team here, despite recent exchanges, but how the rhythm is just a little off.

Love the humour of Bodie with the understatement of the "rough day" and muttering about the broom cupboard.

Thank you!

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

The double act would have to be second nature to them - I can't see an argument totally destroying that if they're on a mission like this one. And I think that's how adults generally behave - save the shit for 'Ron (poor Ron). But yeah, if there's tension it's going to have an impact.

Thanks!

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Oooh your Martell is spot-on ... an excellent scene, full of undercurrents! Thank you, lots to play with ... so um ... I'm gonna go head off ...somewhere, for lucky part 13 *g*

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

Thanks for that! Marty is fun to play with. And yay! for continuance. I just read your entry - wow, you've written an interesting new development. Can't wait to see where that leads.

[ankaree.livejournal.com]

Very well done! The meet was an excellent scene! Thanks!

[kiwisue.livejournal.com]

Very glad you liked it : )