Drabble challenge

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Having another go. Here goes.


Deep Water

Chipped pale blue railings, weakened with rust, turned grey and black by the night.
Beyond them, the midnight of rapidly flowing waters, deceptively calm on the surface.
Fathomless dangers lie therein, open to those fearless enough to plumb their depths.
Was he fearless enough to plumb depths of equal magnitude?
To allow himself to get caught up in the tides of such a force?
The air stirred and the damp wooden seat resettled beneath him.
The weight of an unassuming hand settled upon his knee.
Caught up? Too late. He was already drowning with hope of no rescue.
“Ready?”
“Yeah.”

Comments

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Mmm... intriguing! He'll take the leap (whichever one he is), I'm sure of it. He's got his partner to back him up, after all. ;-) I like the metaphor!

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Thank you. They're both very layered characters, and I'll leave you decide which one it is. ;) But yes, they're always there for each other. ;)

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Wow, I love that double meaning of danger and taking the plunge. And he will - what else can he do? Thanks!

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Thank you honey! Glad that worked for you. He knows now he's already fallen hook line and sinker, like you said, what else can he do? ;)

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

It's Doyle. Gotta be.*g* Wanted to stay up to see you post this - I love the imagery here, of him staring into the water and seeing his own situation. And then that lovely resolution - two simple words, a hand on his knee, and his course of action is clear.

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much Honey! Yes, it's Doyle looking out over the Thames. I'm so very happy this worked well for you. I simply love their understated gestures that mean so much to them both. *sighs* And the icon you have there is perfect. :)

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I like this. The romantic in me always sees the love in spite of the dangers that are lurking.

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Thank you, oh good I am glad.

The romantic in me always sees the love in spite of the dangers that are lurking.

Me too, usually! ;D

[londonronnie.livejournal.com]

Oh, sunshine! I found this incredibly moving.

Thank you!

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Oh thank you so much honey, What a lovely compliment!

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Ooh, lurking dangers to give them an edge... very nice! And The air stirred and the damp wooden seat resettled beneath him - lovely feel to this! Thank you!

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm so glad it worked for you. I particularly liked that line too. Not exactly sure where the drabble came from I just started writing.

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Oooh nicely done, and very spooky too.

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Thank you, honey! Spooky? Do you think? I didn't realise. I can see what you mean though. :)

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

Lovely. Especially the way you described Ray (it is Ray, isn't it?) coming and sitting down beside him - that was brilliant. Thank you for this!

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Thank you! And it is infact Ray sitting looking out over the Thames. :D I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

It was instantly Doyle for me - don't know how you did it, even on re-reading!
Great images and metaphor.

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

I'm so thrilled it worked for you, and I am very glad you liked it. I have always seen Bodie as a very deep character under that calm stoic facade he likes to portray, and I think Ray see that too.
Thank you!

[magnifica7.livejournal.com]

Your drabbles - delightful! :)