I love the way Bodie uses humour as a shield and a weapon. And I like the way the consequences of his actions are being so clearly drawn out for him.
I also very much like your handling of Doyle - the fact that he's not complaining or angsting. He's just doing what's got to be done. I could clearly imagine the look on his face in this line:
Ray came to stand behind her, looking in on the lounge, a genuine smile lightening some of the fatigue shadowing his face. "Looks real nice. You did a good job, Mrs. P."
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Date: 2006-12-29 11:27 am (UTC)I love the way Bodie uses humour as a shield and a weapon. And I like the way the consequences of his actions are being so clearly drawn out for him.
I also very much like your handling of Doyle - the fact that he's not complaining or angsting. He's just doing what's got to be done. I could clearly imagine the look on his face in this line:
Ray came to stand behind her, looking in on the lounge, a genuine smile lightening some of the fatigue shadowing his face. "Looks real nice. You did a good job, Mrs. P."
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