Down to Zero. A story for the Discovered Out of Context Challenge.

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

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This was supposed to be about 500 words long but it grew to be 5,761 words long… Eep!

Header information and story under the cut.


Brand new dandy
First class scene stealer
Walks through the crowd and takes your man.
– Down to Zero – Joan Armatrading.


Down to Zero


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Title: Down to Zero.
Author: Draycevixen
Format: Short story (5761 words).
Circuit Archive/ Pros Lib archiving?: Yes.
Slash/Gene: Slash.
A/N: Written for the Discovered Out of Context challenge at Discoveredinalj.

The prompt:
Brand new dandy
First class scene stealer
Walks through the crowd and takes your man.
– Down to Zero – Joan Armatrading.





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Comments

[greengerbil.livejournal.com]

Oh, I like this! I especially like the way we can see that Doyle is far more interested than Bodie thinks, and the little bits of humour that keep leaking through.
Nobody in the history of the world had ever made such an art form out of leaning as Ray had, his body language always promising so much while at the same time warning that he’d kill anyone who tried to take it without permission.
Aggressive leaning... yeah, that's our Doyle!
and as for Bodie - If there was one thing that could get Bodie off that bed it was the promise of food.
LOL! That's Bodie...! Even true love doesn't affect his appetite that much!
Nice one, Drayce!

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

Wow, that was fast! Thank you! I'm glad to hear that you could see Doyle's interest as I was trying to walk the line between showing it yet not letting Bodie see it.

I tend toward the humourous, writing quite a bit of crack!fiction in my other fandom, so I'm always a little concerned about letting it out too much over here.

Again, thank you for reading and commenting. ♥

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Ha! I'm ever so happy you got a bit more than just 500 words out of that. The counting part was poor genius. Not nice of Bodie to let Doyle drop though *VEG* Love the way poor Bodie has to drink up courage and then making a mess. No wonder Doyle was not happy with him later on.

Do I need say I don't like Willetts? Hope Doyle twisted real hard. I mean art form of leaning or not - nobody touches Doyle but Bodie, end of line.

You really do have the lads down to the point so stop worrying each time you start writing non PWP Pros *G*

[msmoat.livejournal.com]

That was fun! The confrontation the second time Bodie is drunk, is particularly enojoyable: At least he was back to Doyle is straight so he doesn’t fancy me rather than Doyle is bent, but doesn’t fancy me. Heh. Yeah, absolutely.

Poor Bodie! But they got there in the end--and I love it that Doyle was doing his ouwn countdown. *g* Thanks!

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

Yes! This was so much fun - I chuckled and chortled through so much of this. Your drunk, misdirected and misunderstanding Bodie is a joy. As is Doyle's determination to take his partner in hand. So to speak. *g* So much to quote back at you that I particularly enjoyed, I'll just choose a few highlights:
Bodie had been having a much closer relationship with his hand than he’d experienced since his teen years and if that didn’t change soon he was going to end up with arthritis in his wrist. Hee!
And these two beauts from Doyle:
“I really think you should sit down mate. You look about as confident as a pig on ice.”
“Christ you could pout for England. Spit it out.”

As for Willetts, I loved your descrption of him as "a symphony in tan", and Bodie's reaction to him was wonderful.

Bodie was, after all, the sort of decent, dedicated and dependable partner who would help Doyle to bury Willetts’ body, no questions asked. And if Bodie happened to whistle a happy tune while tamping the earth down with his shovel, where would be the harm in that?

You have such a nice touch with these two, I'm really happy you're here and writing longer fics for us. Thank you.

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

What a nice story. I enjoyed the humour and poor twice-drunk Bodie and Doyle finally having enough. And then Bodie finally getting some. I liked that they both had a count going on. Very enjoyable.

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Hee - very fun! Poor old blind and drunk (and blind drunk) Bodie... *g* Thank you!

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

It just kept growing, like a Chia Pet on LSD... Erm...

I'm glad you like the counting bit, as I worried that it might be annoying... I first played with that notion in a different fandom a couple of years ago, and it popped back into my mind when I started thinking of Bodie biding his time.

Thank you for the reassurance ♥ but I think I'll have to rip another piece of PWP next to try to keep the confidence levels up. *g*

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

I couldn't resist having Doyle do his own countdown as the lads are always so much in synch about everything.

Thank you for reading. :D

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm very glad you enjoyed it. :D

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

I'm glad it made you laugh. Thank you for reading. :D

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

It makes me very happy to hear that you think I'm on the right track. I'm very glad it made you laugh, the image of Bodie whistling while burying Willetts in particular, as it amused me but I wasn't sure if it would amuse anyone else. *is strange*

Thank you so much for your kind words and lovely comments.♥

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

I think I'll have to rip another piece of PWP next to try to keep the confidence levels up

Sounds like a damn good plan to me *G*

Btw, I hope you're feeling better by now.

[sunray45.livejournal.com]

I did enjoy that!!

Poor Bodie! He is so confident going after the birds, but when it really matters, he needs lots of Dutch courage to tell, or try to tell, Doyle how he feels. Thank heavens Doyle finally got it all out of him.

Thank you.

[jgraeme2007.livejournal.com]

This was a lot of fun. Enjoyed that first scene at Doyle's flat in particular. Seemed very them.

[mikes-grrl.livejournal.com]

Ooo! This was great! Yay high mileage word count!

I loved Bodie being the mirror image of Willetts, and Bodie's self-defeatist internal snarking. Yet, it still showed him as brave and willing to do the job even when he was convinced he was going to be shot down. Now that is definitely how I see Bodie -- failure might be the only option, but not an excuse. LOL!

This is great. Oh and mmmmmmMMMMMMmmmmmm Bodie in all black. Unh huh. *smacks lips*

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

I'm still tired, but I actually feel more like myself again, thanks for asking.

I'm working on the PWP, a sort of follow up to the first one... After the last one, I feel it is my duty to give Doyle the upperhand *cough* this time.

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I'm very glad you enjoyed it! :D

Thank heavens Doyle finally got it all out of him. *sniggers in highly inappropriate fashion* Double entendre will be the death of me...

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

I'm very new to writing for the lads, so thank you very much for the encouraging remarks. :D

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

Thanks Mikey! ♥

I'm glad you liked his internal snarking because I do see both of them as characters who will get the job done no matter what is going on in their minds. They could never survive in their chosen profession otherwise.

*lets mind wander off to Bodie in black* Hmmmmmmmmm...

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

Enjoyed this very much (and "me too!" re Bodie's idea about decently and dependably helping bury Willets' body ... and just happening to whistle a happy tune the while).

Glad they sorted themselves out at last - Bodie's abused liver and headaches would have matched his poor heartache otherwise! But yes, it was clear that Doyle was involved from the start, though Bodie couldn't see it. Nice one, many thanks!

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

It is always a good thing to enjoy your work whenever you can! *nods sagely*

While I have some experience writing fan fiction elsewhere, I'm very new to writing for the lads so thank you so much for reading and commenting, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

[sunray45.livejournal.com]

Oh bugger!!! Did I really write that??? Blushes. All quite innocent I assure you, that is until you opened my eyes.

You are a wicked woman!! *bg*

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

Yes you did! Wherever was your mind? *sniffs*

Women who behave rarely make history. OR Good girls go to heaven. Bad girls go everywhere! Nah seriously, I'm all the things my Mother can be proud of... and wicked too. Everyone needs a hobby *whistles*

[smirra.livejournal.com]

I enjoyed this very much every of your 31612 characters! I like your style of writing, lot's of funny lines in it! A great icon line: Pout for England!
Drunken oblivious Bodie is fun to read without being shallow.
The story reminds me of a story my father told me, who wanted to go to a fair in town and stopped with his friends at their lokal boozer near the fair, guess what happend? There's even a photo of his gang with him looking quite striking... But I digress. I look forward to more! Thank you!

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much for reading and for the lovely comment! :D I do like to be humorous whenever possible.

"Pout for England" would make a good icon. I'm glad you didn't find Bodie to be shallow here. I always think he feels things strongly even if he doesn't always say them. Often it's only revealed in his facial expressions.

[birggitt.livejournal.com]

And here we have the whistling Bodie *laughs*
This was so much fun! With a very well administrated dosis of angst. My, poor Bodie, thinking about how things had come back to point zero, with a straight Ray who didn't fancyed him insted a bent Ray who didn't fancyed him, and trying "to remember how exactly that was less painful."
Your Bodie voice is just perfect. You have him perfectly nailed, and Ray is almost as good as him.
Seriously, how could I bribe you? I want a loooooooooooooong, long story from you. I'm pretty sure my son is not gonna buy me my AirWolf helicopter, and I'm feeling pretty sad about that. *teary, but very hopeful eyes*

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

Awwww thanks! I find Bodie easier *cough* than Doyle, I think because my sense of humour is closer to Bodie's... all of my family have a pretty dark sense of humour. *g*

This is the longest thing I've written for Pros, Whatever You Want only came in at about 3000 I think. The story I started for the DIALJ summer challenge is up to 16,000+ words but it might never be finished... or be edited severely, it's such a mess. Who knows what'll happen next? :D

Thanks for reading Petal! ♥