Wonderful Rebel, you took an almost impossible grammatical convention - second person present tense -and wound a marvellous fic around it. Really felt the cold - and care - of one Ray Doyle here, and you set up a very sequel friendly vibe here, too. (hint, hint)*g*
One small thing, I think the second 'worse' should be 'worst', the superlative?
Loved lots of bits, but my favourite line was this, you describe the chattering teeth perfectly!
Sod.
That last one is hard to say. Leaves you hissing like a tea kettle,
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Date: 2006-12-10 11:02 am (UTC)One small thing, I think the second 'worse' should be 'worst', the superlative?
Loved lots of bits, but my favourite line was this, you describe the chattering teeth perfectly!
Sod.
That last one is hard to say. Leaves you hissing like a tea kettle,