Wow Slanted Light! This is a great read, you so know the power of words and have a great feeling and sensitivity for natural forces, as your user names suggests! I can feel the wind, shiver at the cold and feel the rain in your words. I also love what shooting2kill said above – using words out of the usual context – makes them gosh, so much more powerful! But on with the story! Loved it from the very first scene, all their words are so them, you have them all spot on!
"Sorry sir, was…" Bodie paused, raised his hands to straighten his tie, "… well, delayed."
I can see this so clearly!
"Ach Doyle, if I knew I would have said so!" Doyle could hear the frustration in Cowley's voice, could imagine his fist clenched white around the receiver.
I can hear this so clearly!
And I could go on but I would end up quoting the entire story here so I’d best stop!
Love B smacking D’s bottom, and the intrigue behind their relationship, felt very natural. I really like that it wasn’t spelt out for us but builds up a slowly evolving picture. It’s a keeper, this! *G*
Oh and can I just say I have high hopes that you will write a hugely long story next! Please say you have one on the cards for next year and I walk away an even happier lass…
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Date: 2006-12-22 10:22 pm (UTC)"Sorry sir, was…" Bodie paused, raised his hands to straighten his tie, "… well, delayed."
I can see this so clearly!
"Ach Doyle, if I knew I would have said so!" Doyle could hear the frustration in Cowley's voice, could imagine his fist clenched white around the receiver.
I can hear this so clearly!
And I could go on but I would end up quoting the entire story here so I’d best stop!
Love B smacking D’s bottom, and the intrigue behind their relationship, felt very natural. I really like that it wasn’t spelt out for us but builds up a slowly evolving picture. It’s a keeper, this! *G*
Oh and can I just say I have high hopes that you will write a hugely long story next! Please say you have one on the cards for next year and I walk away an even happier lass…
MB x