So, generally I'm not a fan of present tense for a story, but you really made this work and it makes sense for this particular story. Nicely done!
I liked the claustrophobic feel, and the, ah, rather unique take on how to get the lads into a small, confined space together.... *g*
I like so much of this (the poem and Doyle's indignation, for instance *g*), but I especially liked the moment of closeness, of a sort of tenderness. This bit: But here, in the dark, Doyle is different. Bodie can feel his hand on the back of his head, pulling him close, and he’s ridiculously grateful he’s not alone.
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Date: 2006-10-31 12:53 pm (UTC)I liked the claustrophobic feel, and the, ah, rather unique take on how to get the lads into a small, confined space together.... *g*
I like so much of this (the poem and Doyle's indignation, for instance *g*), but I especially liked the moment of closeness, of a sort of tenderness. This bit: But here, in the dark, Doyle is different. Bodie can feel his hand on the back of his head, pulling him close, and he’s ridiculously grateful he’s not alone.
That's very nice.
And, yeah, definitely pre-slash in my mind! *g*
Thank you!