An appropriately horrific situation and a wonderful story.
I have to admit to being one of those odd ducks that likes present tense. You can't use it too often, and it would be tough to sustain in a longer piece, but the way you've handled it, it really conveys the immediacy of their predicament.
It's really interesting the way you've layered in Bodie's experiences in Africa. And I really like the way they trade off on looking after each other.
I'll also admit to being in the optimist camp that reads this as pre-slash. Because surely they'll figure it out sooner or later, yeah?
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Date: 2006-10-31 04:08 pm (UTC)I have to admit to being one of those odd ducks that likes present tense. You can't use it too often, and it would be tough to sustain in a longer piece, but the way you've handled it, it really conveys the immediacy of their predicament.
It's really interesting the way you've layered in Bodie's experiences in Africa. And I really like the way they trade off on looking after each other.
I'll also admit to being in the optimist camp that reads this as pre-slash. Because surely they'll figure it out sooner or later, yeah?