Maybe it's self-indulgent to talk about your own story this way, but you brought up the having wasn't as good as wanting line. What I liked was the way Doyle brings it up later, to Bodie--I can just hear the...oh, not exactly stoicism, but "facing reality and getting it over with" in his voice. And Bodie immediately reassures him on that, but not in any kind of overt or cloying way, just very practical: no, that's not the problem, this is. Which, to me, is more reassuring than anything more in-depth. I don't think I can do anything other than "understated". *g*
As for the focus on Bodie--yeah! One of the joys of writing from a particular pov! My current story is all Doyle...Doyle...Doyle...because it's in Bodie's pov. *g*
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Date: 2006-11-10 01:55 pm (UTC)Maybe it's self-indulgent to talk about your own story this way, but you brought up the having wasn't as good as wanting line. What I liked was the way Doyle brings it up later, to Bodie--I can just hear the...oh, not exactly stoicism, but "facing reality and getting it over with" in his voice. And Bodie immediately reassures him on that, but not in any kind of overt or cloying way, just very practical: no, that's not the problem, this is. Which, to me, is more reassuring than anything more in-depth. I don't think I can do anything other than "understated". *g*
As for the focus on Bodie--yeah! One of the joys of writing from a particular pov! My current story is all Doyle...Doyle...Doyle...because it's in Bodie's pov. *g*