[identity profile] hambelandjemima.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] discoveredinalj
Just a dribbly drabble, so no need for a cut. Written for the DOOC challenge, part two. The quote I used is:

Are you drinking because he nearly died or because he didn't? From I, Claudius

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So Near, Yet So Far
 
His hand shakes as he lifts the tumbler to his mouth, the amber liquid sliding smoothly down his parched throat. It burns, but not as much as the craving that constantly burns within him, this need for his partner that simmers and bubbles; always just out of reach, because that’s where he keeps it.
 
He picks up the second glass. He always pours two drinks, because Bodie’s always here. Just because he’s in hospital doesn’t make him any less near.
 
They’ll be the death of each other. He knows it.
 
But they’ll go together, so it won’t matter at all.

Date: 2008-06-08 03:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] msmoat.livejournal.com
Fatalist much? *g* But very nice. I can just see that little scene, after a particularly bad op. Thank you! That was nicely evocative.

Date: 2008-06-08 04:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zamaxfield.livejournal.com
Oh lovely. A shaky Doyle...Bodie's always here... lovely.

Date: 2008-06-08 04:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sc-fossil.livejournal.com
Going out together isn't a good thing unless it's old and grey, in bed shagging. *g* Thanks for the nice little piece, even if it did make me sniffle.

Date: 2008-06-08 07:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com
On re-reading, I realise that this is a little gem. But oh, always just out of reach, because that’s where he keeps it - that hurts! After a close call like this, mightn't they come to understand where they both need to go with their relationship? Pretty please?

*orders more swiss roll*

Date: 2008-06-08 10:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] draycevixen.livejournal.com
I really love this Hambel. You manage to cram a whole scene/story into just 100 words and it really works.

The progression as it builds on itself -- the drink burning to the craving burning to the second glass -- is really nicely structured.

always just out of reach, because that’s where he keeps it. Ah, denial!

Thank you! ♥
Edited Date: 2008-06-08 10:06 pm (UTC)

Date: 2008-06-09 02:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] callistosh65.livejournal.com
Like the dark shiver to this. Thank you.

Date: 2008-06-09 09:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bistokids.livejournal.com
Love this - dark and moving. I copied the same line as everyone else, as it turns out - always just out of reach, because that’s where he keeps it. because it's beautiful, and because it just captures that fragility that they try so hard to keep banked down (and that you see surfacing briefly in eps like The Rack). Well done. ♥

Date: 2008-06-09 03:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] solosundance.livejournal.com
Lovely. Sad and simmering at the same time.

Just because he’s in hospital doesn’t make him any less near.

Waaaah! Yikes, is he on the way out or will he make a last-minute recovery, or is it something minor?? And lo, the drabble begetteth another drabble ... yes?

Date: 2008-06-14 02:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jgraeme2007.livejournal.com
I can see the scene perfectly. Well done.

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