Discovered in the Christmas Tree: Day 28. Post 2 of 4. Questions and Answers.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

Using one of grey853' fabulous banners here! I have them set up as a slideshow on my desktop...

This post is the 'serious' one. It's a question and answer poem with two 'voices' - no apologies to anyone (because it's all my own) and no disclaimers because it could be about anyone, but we know it's about the lads! I wanted to have the alternate verses 'offset' to stress the two voices but LJ and I couldn't agree about the coding so you'll just have to cope!

Thanks to my betas as in the first post. And again, take the icons and feel free to play with them!



Questions and answers.

So if I were to say to you, 'Take care!
Protect that face and body that I call
my own, my world, my universe, my star,'
would you be thoughtful, heed my words of love,
draw back from conflict, take the quiet road,
or would you laugh and disregard my fears?

I'd rather take you by your willing hand,
pull you all helter-skelter down the way
of danger, laughing, yes, but smiling, too,
and leavening the peril with a kiss.
I think you'd follow me and soon forget
your fears, your very thoughts, your warning words.
.
I scarce can think. And if I followed you
all thought would soon be lost to me indeed.
Whirling around the planet of my love
I'd come to see the wild raw atmosphere
as usual, familiar, naught to fear;
and caught up in your smile I'd laugh at death.

We'd welcome all the winds of danger with
a kiss of friendship and a steady gun.
Together we could make the stars our home,
forget mere mortals with their slow concerns.
We'd run from earthly plots and mundane crimes
towards the splendour of the unceasing sun.

And yet I have to spare a fleeting thought
for those we fight for, those who need our care.
Without that conscience which should underpin
our actions, would our feelings sour and die?
The stars might fail to note the earth's concerns
but if we did not heed, could we still love?

My feelings are as constant as the stars.
Whatever creed or ethic underlies
our deeds I care not, only that you should
be mine, and follow where I lead and be
my constant sun, the light by which I steer
my life; my follower and my final goal.

I'll follow you. I'll chase you through the heavens,
careless of danger, laughing in your wake,
but if I am your sun then let my rays
shine on this earth and lighten what they see,
then we can watch and smile and kiss and dream
free in our starry skies, safe in our love.

Then take my hand, come fly with me and see
what wonders we can find, what legends make.
Let's kiss and let our love spill out and down
upon the lesser mortals if you wish.
So long as you are mine I am content
and will go gladly to our destiny.

Consider me content too, but I must
tell you again I'd rather have that face,
that voice, that body whole and in my arms
than gathering glory in the void of space,
so take me by the hand and lead me on
but listen when I say to you, 'Take care!'



   



The next post will be back to fun and games!

Comments

[snailbones.livejournal.com]

Oh lovely! And two such distinct voices too. I loved: I'd come to see the wild raw atmosphere
as usual, familiar, naught to fear; and caught up in your smile I'd laugh at death.

Thank you.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

I'm pleased the voices came across as distinct. I was a bit worried when I realised I couldn't easily set the poem out on the page the way I wanted to. Obviously it didn't matter! Thanks for your comments!

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

Beautiful! Such emotion. I really enjoyed this.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

I'm glad it worked! Thank you for your comments!

[milomaus.livejournal.com]

This is absolutely gorgeous!
And the Icons!!! Great!

(Thanks for the water!!*g*)

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Your lovely comment brought a huge smile to my face!

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

You've been so kind to post all this lads' goodness today! Thank you! Again, very enjoyable and I've run off with a few more icons. :)

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

Hopefully, I will be seeing my icons all over the place! LOL!

[sunray45.livejournal.com]

I've never been really 'into' poetry, but I really loved this. Eternal love...*sigh*

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

I think poetry - any poetry - has to 'speak' to something you feel intensely about. I don't really think a general appreciation of it can be taught, though I do think we can teach the underlying forms etc. so that people can understand how what they're reading works. I'm glad I've written something that appealed to you - and thanks for the comment!

[margaret-r.livejournal.com]

There really aren't any words to describe beautiful this is - romantic, gorgeous - all of that and more. And the voices are perfect:)

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad it worked to you! Thanks for a lovely comment!

[moonlightmead.livejournal.com]

Ooh, nice. I confess, I struggled a bit initially, but then the two voices became clear and it all fell into place. (Yes, I should read the introductions more carefully.)

I particularly like the second verse. A lot of fic goes with the idea of keeping the other out of danger. But I can see "Come on, come with me.." in the direction of danger just as easily.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

I really really wanted to set it out with the alternate verses offset - but somehow my LJ skills weren't up to it. I knew people would be reading with less than full attention - it's Christmas after all!!

And yes, I see them egging each other on, macho-style. Ray would give half a glance at the protective aspect of their work and Bodie would simply be gung-ho! *g*

I'm so glad you liked it!

[maddalia.livejournal.com]

Wow. I am totally in awe. That was beautiful, and such a fantastic idea, making it a question and answer thing. I could tell their voices apart easily and their words were so lovely. It sums up the lads' relationship perfectly.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

And that the voices were clear - I had visions of people skimming it and getting confused so I wanted to offset the alternate verses but my IT skills didn't get that far.

I could 'hear' them while I was writing.