Discovered in the Style of Virginia Woolf

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

An attempt at interior monologue Who’s afraid of Virginia Woolf? Maybe after this, I’ll find out I should be!



Is he really going to do it? He’s shifted close enough. Yeah, Bodie, just lean in a bit more… that’s it. Ah, mate.

His lips are as soft as I thought they’d be. Can’t believe we’re doing this. After the week we’ve had, we need to do something to come down, but I never thought…

Christ, the man can kiss! Open up, mate, let me get my tongue in there. Tastes so good. Embarrassing this, my knees are getting’ weak. Let’s lie down. Easy, sunshine, just come on down here with me. That’s it. I hope that’s not me makin’ all those helpless little noises. No, that one definitely wasn’t me. Mr Tall, Dark and Beautiful is losing his cool.

Oi! Easy on the shirt, there’s a reason they put buttons… Ah, Bodie, touch me there again. Please. His hands are so gentle on me, could stand him to be a bit rougher.

Let’s get his shirt off. Chest is so soft and pale, not like mine. No hair here. Tongue can run freely around his nipples… like that do you? He’s makin’ that little whimpering sound again, goes straight to my prick, that does.

Let’s take this a bit lower, shall we, mate? Tonguing his navel seems to be something he likes. That sound you make, mate, what do you need? He’s movin’ my hands to his trousers. Glad there not as tight as mine, easier to get them off. Pants, too, sunshine, lift up, here we go. Beautiful. I’ll try a little nip here, a kiss… yeah, he likes that! Been a long time since I’ve done this to a bloke. Hope I can make it good for him. Easy, mate. Don’t want to choke me… and ease up on the hair! Oh yeah, enjoying this are you? C’mon, Bodie, let go. Don’t worry about me. I’ll take all you have to offer. There…there. All right, old son, I’ve got you. Breathe. Just breathe. Beautiful. Let me kiss you, share your taste. Good, no? Must be, I can feel you smile.

Ah, strong hands movin’ on me again, warm lips following the fingers. Feels good, that.

Here, let me help with those. Sodding jeans! Just pull ‘em off. Got it. Free. Always knew those big hands would feel good around me. Harder, Bodie. Grab me… harder. I need… more. Wonder if he… aha! Quick to recover, aren’t you, big man?

I want him. Let’s make the invitation clear, I’ll just wrap my legs around his waist… yeah, that got through to him. Hurry, mate. I’m not going to last much longer. Just do it, Bodie. I’m not some fragile virgin. Do it. Yes! Oh, God, that’s good. I’m gonna come. Is he waiting’ for me? Come with me, Bodie. Together, yeah? Now, Bodie, right…fuckin’… now! I can feel spreading warmth, his inside me and mine between us.

Oh Bodie… Bodie… Bodie, I love you.

Bloody hell, did I say that out loud? Must have, I can feel him tensing up. Give him a smile, let him know you’re not going to push for more than he’s willing to give. Christ, me and my big mouth. I’ve probably ruined - what? What was that? He’s laughing at me, the bastard! I didn’t hear what he said. Oh… he said it again. He loves me too? Does he mean it? Yes - yes, it’s there in his eyes. He - Get a hold of yourself, Doyle! Now is not the time… He’s kissing me again, whispering my name. I can’t hold them back, he’s kissing away the tears on my face. Are they mine, or his? Who’d’ve thought the big lug was a romantic?

Ah, Bodie, mate… “I love you.”



Title: Thoughts Unvoiced
Author: Merentha13
Slash or Gen: slash
Archive at ProsLib/Circuit: please
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Disclaimer: Just borrowing the lads; no copyright infringement intended
Notes: Thanks to MoonlightMead and Maddalia for the pre-posting reviews!

I tried the “I Write Like” link and came out with Anne Rice and Stephen King. All Horror! I hope that’s not a reflection on my writing! *g*

"Examine for a moment an ordinary mind on an ordinary day. The mind receives a myriad impressions -- trivial, fantastic, evanescent, or engraved with the sharpness of steel. From all sides they come, an incessant shower of innumerable atoms; and as they fall, as they shape themselves into the life of Monday or Tuesday, the accent falls differently from of old . . . Let us record the atoms as they fall upon the mind in the order in which they fall, let us trace the pattern, however disconnected and incoherent in appearance, which each sight or incident scores upon the consciousness" (Stream of Consciousness Technique 154). Virginia Woolf

Comments

[margaret-r.livejournal.com]

Oh, well done! You've done a great job of showing us Doyle's 'stream of consciousness':D The style suits you and this is really hot! Lovely work.

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I was hesitant to post this, but I received some positive encouragement and here it is! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

Really, really good. And really, really hot!! I wonder if I dare say it's better than your 'normal' narrative style? I'm not always a fan of stream-of-consciousness but this hooked me instantly. And I will be keeping it to re-read.

I have never noticed any hints of Anne Rice or Stephen King in your work... (For what it's worth I dislike Anne Rice and love Stephen King).

I think this challenge is fascinating. It's showing just how clever our Pros writers are!

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

We do have some clever writers, don't we! (I loved your story "There and Back Again"! Hope you're going to post soon!) I have to smile when you said this may be better than my "normal" narrative style - I never really thought I had one! *g* This was different for me in two ways, the stream-of-consciousness and the "hotness". I'm not real comfortable writing the sex bits. I'm so glad you liked this!

[moonlightmead.livejournal.com]

Yay, you posted.

Who’s afraid of Virginia Woolf? Maybe after this, I’ll find out I should be. - Laugh, hardly. This was great. Very hot. I like it a lot.

I don't know why I like "Open up, mate, let me get my tongue in there." so much, but I do!

[maddalia.livejournal.com]

Hee. I know why *I* like that line so much, and I bet it's the same reason as you. *grins cheekily*

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

I appreciate your helping me to get this right! I really wasn't sure it worked when I wrote it, but it seems to have gone over pretty well! Glad you liked the final version.

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

That was fun, and hot! :) Thanks. I enjoyed it.

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked it.

[maddalia.livejournal.com]

Ah, I love this even more on my second (third?) reading! It is great stream-of-consciousness, hot and sweet and everything it should be, really. I see you've kept in all my favourite bits so you already know what they are *g* Thanks for a great read!

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

Thank you! and I do know who's...er... what your favorite bits are! *g*

[snailbones.livejournal.com]

Fantastic! It's not a style I'm normally keen on, but I love the way you've done it - giving just enough information that I don't get lost, but not so much that I get bored. Perfectly done - oh, and deliciously hot too, thank you *g*

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

Thanks for the kind words. I was very nervous about this one, but I guess it turned out all right!

[piskiedust.livejournal.com]

Beautifully done, particularly enjoyed the concept of Mr Tall, Dark and Beautiful losing his cool!

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Have to keep Bodie off balance! I'm glad you enjoyed this. I was a bit nervous about it - the style being something I'd not tried before. (and its good to see you "popping-up" again!)