Stars

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Back then his best mate shut him in the coal-hole.  For a dare or a joke or just because it was flaming well there. 

Doyle had chewed his knuckles, yelled abuse.  He’d emerged smoky-faced, heart hammering under cover of a cocky smile.  Gave his former best mate the juiciest black eye.

These days random injustices came in deeper, blacker pits.  With shackled wrists and taped up mouths, him and his best mate both in it up to their necks.

But that was then and this is now.

The flashing beacon of Bodie’s eyes, endless hope in a night without stars.

Comments

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Oh, nice... and hurrah for you drabbling our lads! *g*

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

I was happy to manage a drabble :) I'd half thought about a drabble for each part of that poem you prompted me with - the 'night without stars' and the 'sleep without dreams' but that was way too ambitious *g* Nice pome though, and I love the name 'Ardella'. I looked it up and it apparently means 'blooming meadow' - there was a silly sort of drabble in there too. Hee :D

[merentha13.livejournal.com]

I love this. The last line is brilliant! I'm off to read it again.

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Aw thank you :D

[cornishcat.livejournal.com]

God, there's a great depth to this... keep reading it and you find more layers. Lovely.

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Thank you, ma'am ♥

[etain-antrim.livejournal.com]

Great link of past and present!

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Thanks, that was what I was trying for :D

[lillianorchid.livejournal.com]

Absolutely love the last line! :) Love it.

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Eee, look at Bodie with his bed-head hair and rather fine shoulders... lovely icon! (and thank you!)

[lillianorchid.livejournal.com]

Thanks. He does look rather nice after he's just woken up, doesn't he? ;D (and you're welcome! :D)

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

Beautifully done, and I love that last line too!

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Thanks! byslantedlight's poem prompt should take the credit for the last line really as the "night without stars" image was what got me going :D

[snailbones.livejournal.com]

Delicious - I've read it three times over, and found something different each time ♥

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Thanks, me dear, I was relieved to squeeeeze a drab out by bedtime :D

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

Whoa! Look at you with the imagery and the emotional punch in just 100 words. Loved this, made me shiver.

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Ooh a shiver, yays! Thanks, darlin '*g*

[cloudless-9193.livejournal.com]

endless hope in a night without stars. So beautiful! :-)

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Thank you, but not entirely mine - see prompt poem here (http://discoveredinalj.livejournal.com/233605.html?thread=5872261#t5872261) *g*

[cloudless-9193.livejournal.com]

Actually, the endless hope is from you, and that's all that matters. ;-)

[moonlightmead.livejournal.com]

Oh, I love this. The last line is beautiful, but I also very much like emerged smoky-faced, heart hammering under cover of a cocky smile.