Discovered in a Christmas Cracker, Day 15
Dec. 15th, 2012 09:35 pmThe first of at least two, hopefully 3 offerings :)
“Waste of time. He’s not ‘ere.”
"Mickey’s normally reliable. Something’s happened."
"He’s not here. And I’d rather be…?"
"Watch out!"
A crack of bullets gouges chips from nearby concrete: they run, take cover, eyes searching the wasteland of bomb-haunted rubble. They catch their breath like hunting animals, panting rapidly.
Across cratered ground the factory ruins loom large.
"First floor. Scaffolding." Bodie has soldier’s eyes.
He crouches, ready to run, to draw fire. Then Doyle's hand covers his, easy as a kiss. I guard you, and you, me.
He leaps forward. The future is unknown, but Doyle will always save him.
Title: Wasteland
Author: Kiwisue
Slash or Gen: Slash, natch
Archive at ProsLib/Circuit: Yes
Author's Name for Archiving (if different to above): KWS
Disclaimer: My interpretation of what I see on-screen
Notes: Drabble
“Waste of time. He’s not ‘ere.”
"Mickey’s normally reliable. Something’s happened."
"He’s not here. And I’d rather be…?"
"Watch out!"
A crack of bullets gouges chips from nearby concrete: they run, take cover, eyes searching the wasteland of bomb-haunted rubble. They catch their breath like hunting animals, panting rapidly.
Across cratered ground the factory ruins loom large.
"First floor. Scaffolding." Bodie has soldier’s eyes.
He crouches, ready to run, to draw fire. Then Doyle's hand covers his, easy as a kiss. I guard you, and you, me.
He leaps forward. The future is unknown, but Doyle will always save him.
Title: Wasteland
Author: Kiwisue
Slash or Gen: Slash, natch
Archive at ProsLib/Circuit: Yes
Author's Name for Archiving (if different to above): KWS
Disclaimer: My interpretation of what I see on-screen
Notes: Drabble
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Date: 2012-12-16 07:39 am (UTC)I am actually wincing a little at the rhythms (or lack of) in the last line. Otherwise I'm pretty happy with it.
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Date: 2012-12-15 01:19 pm (UTC)That was lovely, thank you - you've squeezed so much gorgeous imagery into a small space! I love the wasteland of bomb-haunted rubble - you can see it straight away.
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Date: 2012-12-15 05:15 pm (UTC)Lots going on in a brief peak into the lad's world. Well done!
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Date: 2012-12-15 09:08 pm (UTC)The rest perfect!
Thanks for sharing!
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Date: 2012-12-15 11:15 pm (UTC)That was fab, thank you! *g*
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Date: 2012-12-16 01:53 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-12-16 03:49 am (UTC)Such a strong scene! Well done! :D
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Date: 2012-12-16 10:34 pm (UTC)