Another drabble - sorry to inflict!!

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Title: Still of the Night

Prompt: Fog

The cold chill of the night coupled with the dense fog helped to hide him in the shadows.
Lurking there like a spy. No, not a spy; a spider waiting to kill the prey.
Except...
...he didn’t want to kill.
He didn’t even want to spy.
In reality, he didn’t even want to be there.
It was like a compulsion; like he had to be there or die.
The fascination had increased day by day, night by night, until the magnet had drawn him close.
And so he watched.
Silently in the dark.
Waiting for the right time to strike.

Comments

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

I like this, but I'm confused. Who is he? Who is he watching? It's a compelling image, but I'd love to know more.

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Thanks for your comments. I must admit, I debated long and hard with myself whether to name names, but then I thought no. Mystery was what I was after, and I decided to leave it up to the reader to decide who was watching who/whom??? LOL

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

:shiver: Very atmospheric - this needs to be a series, my friend. You set it up so well and now I want to know MORE!!

[probodie.livejournal.com]

It would seem you arent the only one. I might have to continue this one, then :D Thanks for your comments.

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Wow, that one gave me goose bumps. Who's watching who and why? From the atmosphere and the mixed emotion I'd say Bodie's watching Doyle, not knowing what else he could do. Right - that one screams for a sequel. I can hear it loud and clear!

[probodie.livejournal.com]

I decided to leave it up to the reader to decide who was doing what. I have one idea myself, but I'm not saying anything more. Thanks for commenting - and watch this space!

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Most intriguing - and poetic. Love the spy/spider thing. More would be cool! :)

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Thank you - there is a distinct possibility of more :D

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

You have me pondering. Who's after who? Good idea, making me think about this one. So many possibilities. Thanks.

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

Tossing out a thought. This reminds me of the beginning of "Whisper of a Kill". I could see Bodie lurking, thinking this.

[probodie.livejournal.com]

I have my own thoughts who it is, but I decided to leave it up to the reader. Thanks!

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

Yeah, I like that you've done that. Gives me something to ponder.

[empty-mirrors.livejournal.com]

Interesting. My money's on Bodie watching Doyle too.

[probodie.livejournal.com]

*g* I'm not saying ;)

[nakeisha.livejournal.com]

Oh, very well done. Very tense and powerful.

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Thank you Nikki :D

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

I can so imagine this as Bodie, patiently waiting for the moment when everything is perfect to make his move on Ray.

Not only have you painted such imagery but made it so thought provoking too.

Really lovely honey, I thoroughly enjoyed this.
Thank so much for sharing this with us. :)

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

Great! Did you mean it to be a poem? Because it is. I've been writing drabble poems for my original character muse and I love reading other people's!

[probodie.livejournal.com]

Thank you. It actually wasnt intended to be a poem, but I bow to your greater knowledge *g*