Drabble Tree Challenge

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

What a fantastic challenge! *climbs into the drabble tree*

This follows on from hambelandjemima's drabble, whose final word was 'before'.
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Before, it was easy.

Before, he relished the danger. Threw himself into harm’s way with vicious glee and no real belief in his mortality.

But that was before. Before he clambered into his partner’s flat, found him helpless and half-dead in a pinkish pool of blood and milk. Before he was forced to stand apart, relying on others to do what he should have done, to protect and preserve the only person that mattered in his fucked-up, isolated, terrifying world. Before he realised that, despite all his instincts, he’d started to care.

Now?

Now, he is afraid. All the time.

Comments

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

to protect and preserve the only person that mattered in his fucked-up, isolated, terrifying world. This line makes me shiver, it conveys so much of Bodie's position at that time. Bravo, a heady use of 100 words.

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

*is thrilled to cause shivers*

Thank you. ♥

[draycevixen.livejournal.com]

*wildly applauds*

That's a whole story and an amazing amount of angst shoe horned into only 100 words.

This found him helpless and half-dead in a pinkish pool of blood and milk. in particular resonates with me, there's just something so utterly benign about milk. *is strange*

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

*curtseys becomingly*

Hee - see me angst! Bit of a rarity, that, now I come to think about it. *makes mental note to angst more*

I know, the milk thing is a fantastic image (the canon, I mean) - the mundane-ness really adds weight to the drama of the event.

Thanks!:D

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Perfect, absolutely perfect. Especially the last line which goes both ways I dare say. Thanks for climbing the tree!

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Especially the last line which goes both ways I dare say

I'd say so. Well, they said so themselves, didn't they? (Ojuka)

Thank you! :D

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Mixed Doubles. Obviously. Not Ojuka. *is dumb crud*

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

Lovely stuff! but obviously heart-rending and unbearably poignant too!

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Really glad you had your heart rent enjoyed it.:D

[firlefanzine.livejournal.com]

Beautiful!
Thanks!

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Thank you for commenting - glad you liked. :-)

[mab-browne.livejournal.com]

I like the levels at which you can look at this.

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Part of the fun was the challenge of trying to introduce layers in such a short framework. I remain a fan of the drabble as a writing form for this very reason.

[hambelandjemima.livejournal.com]

That's beautiful. I'm assuming that he hasn't told Ray how much he cares, but it could be read either way.
♥

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

A-ha! *tries to look mysterious, fails*

Thanks, Hambel.

[sunray45.livejournal.com]

When I read the last word, 'before', in hambelandjemima's drabble, I thought no one would be able to start off with that word, but you have done it just so beautifully.

Poor Bodie, afraid all the time.

Wipes tear from eye. Thank you so much.

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Whereas I thought 'before' was such a brilliant prompt that I was racing to get in before the crowd! 'Flaring', on the other hand, had me completely stumped. That's why this is such a great challenge for a comm like this.

Glad you liked it. *hands over tissues*

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Ooh, gives me shivers, this one! Thank you! *g*

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Hee - more shivers! (Seems only fair, you've caused me to shiver often enough. :) )

Thanks - glad you liked it.

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

This is heart-tugging. Very emotional in so few words. Thanks.

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Thaks for your lovely comment - glad you enjoyed it. :)

[halotolerant.livejournal.com]

Egad, what a blast of feeling. Fantastic use of the drabble and almost poetry really.
Glorious
♥

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Poetry is something I only ever achieve by accident, unfortunately! Glad you liked this - and sorry for the delayed response. :)