Drabbling

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

My prompt from byslantedlight was swami (swami?? ow, head hurts!)

"I know your future, Ray."

"How do you know?" Four words hissed between clenched teeth, costing Ray seconds of preciously guarded breath. He felt his ribs expand against his bloodsoaked shirt, felt the rough fabric chafe his skin. Reality was Bodie's hand clenched around his own lax fingers, Bodie's unrelenting certainty in a world suffused with agony.

Warm air brushed his neck. "You'll come home with me and we'll do it right this time. Oh yeah, know it all, don't I."

"My very own swami." Four words forced through a pain-choked laugh, part defiant challenge, part triumphant capitulation.

Comments

[callistosh65.livejournal.com]

Bravo, you got 'swami' in - and perfectly, too! Such a classy hundred words here. I enjoyed the idea of Bodie's unrelenting certainty especially, and a great last line.

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

I had to blink at the screen three times - "swami? did she mean swami??"

Oh well, it made me work for it *g*. Thank you!

[schnuffi.livejournal.com]

Wonderful! Now way he can die now. I love the way they keep each other going in times like these. Thanks!

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

I would never let Ray die - neither would Bodie ;). Thank you!

[empty-mirrors.livejournal.com]

*shiver* but yeah. You hit that nail beautifully.

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly! And of course I have the "coming home" scene played out it in my head - always happy endings!

V

[heliophile-oxon.livejournal.com]

triumphant capitulation - brilliant! And unrelenting certainty. They must indeed go home and do it right this time, so Ray has just got to make it!

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

Ray does, I promise. In fact, the homecoming could be a whole 'nother story...

thanks for the note!

[myrebelcat.livejournal.com]

Is there an extra "right" in there? I like the challenge/capitulation concept at the end. Believe in the Bodie! ;-)

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

darn, you're right right! Fixed - and thank you so much!

V

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

Brillantly done. I love the way they keep each other going and why does it always take deep hurt or injury to wake these two up?

Thank you!

And thanks for sharing!

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

LOL - I know, we hurt 'em so they can find each other. Strange hobby ;). But if that's what it takes to get them to their happy ending, I'm game *g*.

Thanks - V

[crimson-37.livejournal.com]

LOL... and I am so glad you are. *g* I always feel strangely conscious of my kink for a story like this. But I now realise I'm so not the only one. :)) Thank goodness.

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

Oh, cool! h/c for us junkies. Very good. I liked it. Thanks, Veronica.

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

I know, I'm shameless, but Bodie suffers so beautifully when Ray is hurt. And they'll have a happy ending, of course - can't have it any other way!

(**waves at Jim and Blair*** "Hi, boys!")

thanks! V

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I'm so happy to see you writing Pros. You know I've always loved your Sentinel stories.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

Great image!

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much - appreciate it!

V

[justacat.livejournal.com]

I love this! What a great use of the prompt! I can hear Ray choking those words out, part laughing, part challenging, part capitulating...

(And would you like it archived?)

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

Hey, thank you! (and you just know all he wants to do is get better fast!)

and you betcha, archive away *g*

V

[justacat.livejournal.com]

You know, it just occurred to me - it needs a title for me to archive it. I could just call it "Drabble" (though I can only do that once for each author)...or do you have a title you'd like me to use?

(And I keep loving this...I'm really not a drabble fan at all, not enough of a fix for me, but a few of these really hit me, and this was one of them. Of course, what they really did was make me long to read the larger stories of which they were a part! :sigh:)

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

Oh yeah, duh *smacks self*. erm, how about "Seer". Short, to the point, and as much as my sleepy brain can come up with this morning.

And thanks again! You know, it makes me want to write the story behind it, too - and the 'going home' part *g*. (Because I'm a big sap and love the comfort with my hurt ;).)

[magnifica7.livejournal.com]

Oh, great drabble - thank you so much for sharing! :)

[veronicaluv.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and so appreciative that you let me know!

V