Drabble Challenge - "Fences"

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Title: Fences
Author: bistokids
Slash or Gen: Slash
Word Count: 100
Archive at ProsLib/Circuit: Yes please
Author's Name for Archiving (if different to above): Bistokids
Disclaimer: Do I have to? Oh OK, they're not mine.
Notes: Written for the April Drabble Challenge - my prompt was 'fences'


People had said Bodie put up walls.

He didn’t really. Fences, more than walls. Partitions, keeping everything safely separate.

Childhood. Well, OK, that one was a wall.

Travelling. Fence between that and ‘mercenary’, so he could remember the thrill of one without the taint of the other.

Army. Northern Ireland. SAS. All nicely fenced in. Not forgotten, not blanked out, just safely separate.

CI5. Doyle.

Doyle, barging past carefully deflective phrases with shattering precision. No respecter of privacy. Scornful of secrets. Doyle, who reached out, dragged down the fences, let everything bleed together.

And yet, with Doyle, it didn’t hurt.

Comments

[ancastar.livejournal.com]

Oh! I really like that. Drabbles are trickier than they look because they need to feel complete, and the reader should feel like they've learned something. I think you accomplished both objectives here with precision and grace. Thank you!

[bistokids.livejournal.com]

Precision and grace - yay! Thanks! I had in mind the 'instructions' about how a drabble should be a story in itself - and I really enjoy the mathematical aspect of this form of writing.

I'm delighted you liked it. :D