Ficlet: A Palpable Hit
Jan. 13th, 2010 02:03 pm*creeps out of lurkerdom and winces at the brightness of the sunshine on the snow*
It's only 518 words and hasn't had any beta input but please enjoy! It was our lane and car park that inspired me so have a picture, too. (There's a trailer at the end but I don't know how to point to it from here.)

Squeak-scrunch.
Their footsteps were loud and their clothes were vivid against the snow.
“A good job we aren’t trying to follow anyone. They’d hear us coming a mile off.” Doyle swung his arms, hands enclosed in suede gloves, gesturing at the street and the whiteness.
“D’you think snow will scare the terrorists then?” Bodie sounded amused but dubious.
“No but they’ll be as obvious as us and that’s not their style. They’ll stay indoors perfecting their bombs and their plans - all the more work for us when it thaws. Take it from me, when I was a copper we spent snowy days inside. The criminals were all inside too, one way or another.” Doyle grinned.
“We’ll probably be stuck in records,” said Bodie and they groaned in unison, turning into the car park, even though they were on foot. They’d struggled to get here and last night they’d abandoned the Capri. Now they wanted to check its antifreeze, maybe tuck it up with a rug inside its bonnet. The snow was pristine, glinting in the sunshine. They were the first to arrive, at least in the car park.
“Why have we trudged through this lot to get to records, then?” Doyle was beginning to sound grumpy. It had been a long walk, past marooned cars, a bus that was going nowhere and signs to say the Underground was closed - the drivers couldn’t get to work, it seemed.
“Got to show willing,” said Bodie, trying to sound bracing and failing.
“Willing to what? Push pens?”
“Defend Queen and country?”
“Nah - not a chance in this weather.” The finality in Doyle’s voice made Bodie’s lips twitch but as he started to reply they heard snow-altered footsteps behind them and turned with lightning reflexes only slightly slowed by the stuff underfoot. Murphy, Jax and Susan, all muffled up to the nines, were at the gate, obviously sharing their determination to prove they could get to work despite the fact that the capital had ground to a halt.
Afterwards nobody was quite sure who had thrown the first snowball, except of course, the thrower and they weren’t telling. Doyle always thought it been Bodie.
Soon it was a melee, every man (or woman) for him or herself. Snow flew, aimed by expert marksmen, powder drifting from the white trajectories, settling on clothes and hair. Soft thwacks joined the squeal of dodging feet and there was carefree laughter. At some point Cowley arrived and after a quick glance joined in, his face cracking in a huge and unaccustomed grin.
A snowball hit Doyle exactly on his heart - an accurate thwump then clumps of compressed snow clinging to his wool jacket, melting slowly from the warmth of the lithe body beneath. He looked across at Bodie, and blinked eyelashes frosted with the snow that was falling again, gentle but inexorable against the sun.
“Got me,” he acknowledged with a smile and Bodie gave a small almost formal bow
“I know,” his expression said, and he rolled another snowball in gloved hands while Doyle stood waiting, wrapped in the pleasure of the morning..
Title: A palpable hit.
Author: moth2fic
Slash or Gen: Slash
Archive at ProsLib/Circuit: If somebody wants to, OK, but there are only 518 words.
Disclaimer: Not mine
Summary: Snow falls on London
It's only 518 words and hasn't had any beta input but please enjoy! It was our lane and car park that inspired me so have a picture, too. (There's a trailer at the end but I don't know how to point to it from here.)
Squeak-scrunch.
Their footsteps were loud and their clothes were vivid against the snow.
“A good job we aren’t trying to follow anyone. They’d hear us coming a mile off.” Doyle swung his arms, hands enclosed in suede gloves, gesturing at the street and the whiteness.
“D’you think snow will scare the terrorists then?” Bodie sounded amused but dubious.
“No but they’ll be as obvious as us and that’s not their style. They’ll stay indoors perfecting their bombs and their plans - all the more work for us when it thaws. Take it from me, when I was a copper we spent snowy days inside. The criminals were all inside too, one way or another.” Doyle grinned.
“We’ll probably be stuck in records,” said Bodie and they groaned in unison, turning into the car park, even though they were on foot. They’d struggled to get here and last night they’d abandoned the Capri. Now they wanted to check its antifreeze, maybe tuck it up with a rug inside its bonnet. The snow was pristine, glinting in the sunshine. They were the first to arrive, at least in the car park.
“Why have we trudged through this lot to get to records, then?” Doyle was beginning to sound grumpy. It had been a long walk, past marooned cars, a bus that was going nowhere and signs to say the Underground was closed - the drivers couldn’t get to work, it seemed.
“Got to show willing,” said Bodie, trying to sound bracing and failing.
“Willing to what? Push pens?”
“Defend Queen and country?”
“Nah - not a chance in this weather.” The finality in Doyle’s voice made Bodie’s lips twitch but as he started to reply they heard snow-altered footsteps behind them and turned with lightning reflexes only slightly slowed by the stuff underfoot. Murphy, Jax and Susan, all muffled up to the nines, were at the gate, obviously sharing their determination to prove they could get to work despite the fact that the capital had ground to a halt.
Afterwards nobody was quite sure who had thrown the first snowball, except of course, the thrower and they weren’t telling. Doyle always thought it been Bodie.
Soon it was a melee, every man (or woman) for him or herself. Snow flew, aimed by expert marksmen, powder drifting from the white trajectories, settling on clothes and hair. Soft thwacks joined the squeal of dodging feet and there was carefree laughter. At some point Cowley arrived and after a quick glance joined in, his face cracking in a huge and unaccustomed grin.
A snowball hit Doyle exactly on his heart - an accurate thwump then clumps of compressed snow clinging to his wool jacket, melting slowly from the warmth of the lithe body beneath. He looked across at Bodie, and blinked eyelashes frosted with the snow that was falling again, gentle but inexorable against the sun.
“Got me,” he acknowledged with a smile and Bodie gave a small almost formal bow
“I know,” his expression said, and he rolled another snowball in gloved hands while Doyle stood waiting, wrapped in the pleasure of the morning..
Title: A palpable hit.
Author: moth2fic
Slash or Gen: Slash
Archive at ProsLib/Circuit: If somebody wants to, OK, but there are only 518 words.
Disclaimer: Not mine
Summary: Snow falls on London
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Date: 2010-01-13 02:26 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2010-01-13 02:29 pm (UTC)Thank you!
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Date: 2010-01-13 03:12 pm (UTC)And of course it was Bodie! :-)
Thank youuuuuuuuuuu!
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Date: 2010-01-13 03:21 pm (UTC)ETA - Oh, and I've just noticed it's locked too - would you mind terribly unlocking it? There are still some non-lj people who like to see the stories etc from Dialj too... (If you've got a very specific reason for locking, then do let me know!)
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Date: 2010-01-13 03:59 pm (UTC)Actually, if you'd like (and no worries about it, cos I've never done it myself) - the way I've noticed some people doing the trailers, so that people can see where they are, is in a separate cut. So the story itself goes under the first cut (d'you use the html window, or rich text?) and then the trailer goes under a second cut, so there are "cut titles" if you like for them both - so if they want to see the trailer first then they can, and if they want to go straight to the story, they can... I can tell you more specifically if you use html, but not so much if you use the rich text window to post, cos I never do... *g*
I can also erase this modly thread too... *g*
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Date: 2010-01-13 04:03 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-01-13 04:05 pm (UTC)To do two cuts you just need to end the first cut, and then start a new one. You end it with <*/lj-cut*> (without the asterisks, of course!) at the end of the story/pics/whatever, and then just start the next one as normal. So you can have a zillion different cuts in a single post, if you like... *g*
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Date: 2010-01-13 04:19 pm (UTC)I'm wondering if the two-cut-scroll thing is a new-ish lj thing, actually, because I've not noticed it before and it seems like a nice way around the header-spoiler thing (if you can get people to remember to use it, of course - if they forget at the bottom, you're not spoiled anyway, but if they forget at the top - automatic spoilers...)
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Date: 2010-01-13 04:22 pm (UTC)Thanks for your patience! *g*
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Date: 2010-01-13 03:40 pm (UTC)Thanks for sharing this.
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Date: 2010-01-13 04:02 pm (UTC)Ah, that's just lovely, thank you... and I thought Cowley joining in was the perfect touch! ♥
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Date: 2010-01-13 04:09 pm (UTC)for a few glorious moments - even Cowley!
LOL - that poor man doesn't get nearly enough fun imo *g*
I forgot to say - cool photo too! You have a LOT more snow than us in sunny Dorset *g*
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Date: 2010-01-13 05:26 pm (UTC)Thank you!
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Date: 2010-01-13 09:29 pm (UTC)And we've been tucking our Rover up with a blanket!
Glad to please!!
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Date: 2010-01-14 12:41 pm (UTC)A palpable hit
Date: 2010-01-14 01:32 pm (UTC)“Got me,” he acknowledged with a smile and Bodie gave a small almost formal bow
“I know,” his expression said, and he rolled another snowball in gloved hands while Doyle stood waiting, wrapped in the pleasure of the morning.
- is a beautiful description of Doyle's happy acceptance of Bodie's love. Thank you so much for the treat!
Re: A palpable hit
Date: 2010-01-14 06:19 pm (UTC)Catching up on some reading
Date: 2010-06-03 06:52 pm (UTC)Re: Catching up on some reading
Date: 2010-06-03 09:13 pm (UTC)